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Louis de Clairvoile's avatar

Beautifully done. There’s a rhythm here that isn’t just sexual—it’s architectural. Each line builds on the last until it stops being a command and becomes something else: an invocation. The voice doesn’t just demand; it creates space for surrender.

I love how it captures that moment where desire stops being about pleasure and turns into language—where what’s spoken is what’s done. The repetition of come here isn’t coercion, it’s gravity.

It’s rare to see rawness written with this kind of precision. It doesn’t just want the body; it wants the response—the shiver that makes the poem itself exhale.

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Helen Higgins's avatar

This is gorgeous, and sexy, and incredibly clever. I love how this ends. It's just brilliant.

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